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Special Review (fanfiction) Ehyyy of _TataTokietta_

Good evening, my beloved poisoned sweets. How are you? I
tonight, thanks to the PMS (premenstrual syndrome ), I feel bad and sour.
What does that mean for you? Whether you
pecks a review. But no review whatsoever.
Tonight, I offer you in sacrifice a fanfiction!
Pour a cup of tea and take some muffins (watch those cyanide, I do not want to collect dead bodies), which begins!


(My comments in brackets in pink)
Title: Ehyyy (If good day starts in the morning ... I commend the title, really)
Author: _TataTokietta_ (And also for the nickname)
Site of origin:
EFP (EFP permits only brief quotations, but the story is all over long- begins to count - seven lines.
How do you make BRIEF citations, with seven lines of history?
You can not, then I'll rattle and throw in the ficcina 'LJ entirely.)

(BAMBI) (Bambi?) I and Sara walk through the streets of Berlin, we just leave the disc ... We see a guy more than anything else we feel her presence (No, then ... Either you see or feel it, you decide) ... We run at incredible speed towards him when I (Clearly, these personal pronouns a cock is totally unnecessary. It was clear already that it's you feel the wall, and my grandmother who was passing by) feel like a wall, as if I were to beat ... oh no, the blood is too irresitibile (Oh my God, a Crossover-Twilight Tokio Hotel. Kill me) (The wall would be the smell of blood?) I must go or hold your breath ... (Go, please. At least the story ends now) Sara have more endurance, I do not. I ask him what it's called (Sara?) , when suddenly I admit ... Tom Tokio Hotel (Ovvio. Two vampire fangirl walk to Berlin and by chance meet their idol on the floor half dead. Credible) ... I think: "oh casserole dish, but I just had this happen here?!? (What ungrammatical way of thinking) "oook, and mo what? (Go back to school and learn grammar?) (No eh?) simple, I call his brother! (Of course) I also see a sudden bill (see What do you like least. But you could still Capitalize name) lying on the ground bleeding and re-think, "what the fuck! but two out of two tonight? " (Natural, Sara was left without a suitor otherwise) watch them ... They are too good to be able to bleed to death ... (That seems so cool if you can not physically die in 'so here I am) I tell Sary - tense, I can not leave them to die like this! or I'll do it or you do it! - will nods his head and throws up bill bite, I do the same with tom ... (pretending not to notice that a phrase first said that it was just one of two. Oops ...) which are passed out luck, otherwise you know that screams! (What you say, it contains the enthusiasm, as it is out of place?) load them in the car (Appearance of nothing, since early ambulation case) and bring them to our house ...- -------------------------------------------------- -------------------------------- (What is' is stripe?) Ta dan! here is a new storiaaa! understand what we are? (Sure you want to know?) (Two stupid / Mormon vampire? No, because they are synonyms) comunqueeee ... the next chapter will be about half and half will tom on ( The character, dammit! ) (In FF there are eleven personal names. Four capital letters, not seven. So you know the simple rules, Tata. You refuse to apply their own!) . .. happy reading! Dory


I would like to point out that I was good and I did not correct all the mistakes, because otherwise it would come out, even if the script is short.
Now to the beautiful comments, they deserve.

XxxX_Ice Angel_XxxX
Doryyyyy!! (Enthusiasm A Cappella) Viewed ke I did? Anyway I knew ... This story is fantastic! (I would have to say) Wow! as a good beginning promises moooooooolto (Ri I would fault) , sn me soooooo curious (Me Tarzan, You Quote) cm to see more. Anyway I like the name Bambi! (In fact it is a great name ... for a fawn)
continues, I recommend
great!! ( No) kussoni (Kussoni?)
tvttb


Saltellina14
mlt but I like you poxxo kiedere a favor? you can put in HTML xk is written so small Voja close the page (not for HTML that one would like to close the page, I assure you. Instinct right, wrong reason) (Indeed, it is so short that HTML is less of a problem, I would say) and then lost a fic ke maybe it bellixxima (No looking, quiet. You do not lose anything) continues .... soon .... cmq Kuss (But what is' kuss I did not this kiss? ) Saltellina14

For today we finished, I thank the public for the kind attention given me.
If this kind of entertainment is welcome, I will continue.
If there is pleasing, however, continue

^ ^ Ps: The reviews set this way, were created by Poisonous Bites .
I are just inspired.
I find reviews for stories of this kind, are so much fun ^ ^
I would do with books, but of course publish five to six hundred pages in this way is crazy Oo I would steal too much time.
not say that I will continue to set as the comments today, I might style depending on which I seem most suitable for single ficcina.
This time I got it, tomorrow who knows ...